LiamMcMarsha

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LiamMcMarsha

PROLOGUE:
          Take it from me; lying on the ceiling of a falling levitating train being choked by a vampire you thought could be the missing piece of your unwoven mat of love is not as fancy as it sounds. I guess every beginner has luck, and mine of finding a proper suitor was as bad as my cooking.
          
          
          At a point like this I can't help but wonder what had gotten over me to trade a three layered jelly stick for a seat next to him.
          
          
          Despite warning him one-too many times that my blood tasted like rotten rat poison, he still had the guts to lean his fangs closer. 
          
          
          Important to note though; his teeth were not as stretchy as those of trolls, there was a taste of lavender and a faint ordure of rosemary.
          
          
          Cut the crap, I am about to die on my favorite day of the year.
          
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          https://www.wattpad.com/story/364572332

LiamMcMarsha

Finish the lyrics.
          
          Violins playing and the angels crying....

The__Tourtured__Poet

@LiamMcMarsha 
            
            
            You commented on my positivity book it didn't seem like you were okay
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LiamMcMarsha

@LiamMcMarsha wait, is this part of the lyrics?
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The__Tourtured__Poet

@LiamMcMarsha 
            
            What happened my friend I'm here for you
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LiamMcMarsha

Finish the lyrics.
          
          I'm still holding on to everything that's dead and gone....

Randemonium

@LiamMcMarsha welkom in europa blijf hier tot ik doodga
            europapa europapa
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The__Tourtured__Poet

@Lily_Writesss 
            
            Here I am alone between the heavens and the embers ❤️❤️❤️
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Lily_Writesss

@The__Tourtured__Poet Now you're in the stars and six feet's never felt so far....
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Contino05

Hi I was wondering if you would be interested in reading my story the house of gangsters I would love to hear your comments about it 

LiamMcMarsha

@Contino05 I'll look at it when I get time ☺️
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LiamMcMarsha

The New Carmiabell Locks Blurb is on fire. Short and precise to hook you up.
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/364572332

DeejayDJ010

@LiamMcMarsha I have read books with longer paragraphs as well as longer chapters than I've ever written :) So I'm fine with it
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DeejayDJ010

@LiamMcMarsha Will try to read over the weekend
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LiamMcMarsha

@DeejayDJ010 Thanks.
            By the way, I would suggest, you make your paragraphs a little shorter. Statistics have it that most people are not very compliant with long paragraphs.
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