LunaMoonSky15

Hello, I have decided to create another new account for my fantasy books:)
          	
          	ManhwaLover1, is the name of my new account.
          	
          	The books there, will be more about Villainess's and Heroine's.
          	
          	Always, LunaMoonSky15 

CrazyHobbit24

I read your story "The Moons Daughter". I think it's good, but unfortunately a bit short.
          I have some ideas how you could make the story longer.

LunaMoonSky15

@CrazyHobbit24 I'll try to do that with my next book The Sun's Daughter. Thank you!
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CrazyHobbit24

She might have some difficulties in her new pack, as she was so mistreated in her old one. If you're already embellishing that, the story is already longer. At the beginning, when she is still afraid of the boys' movements and they help her to put her past behind her.
            That sort of thing. Just a suggestion.
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