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Thanks for following me, Starspeeder! I was very happy when I saw the little post on my board saying that you're following me! I hope you don't become fed up with my fan fiction updates, but I do have a Fantasy book I'm currently working on, so please don't despair.

StarSpeeder

It's fine... I'm not a hater xD If I don't like fan fiction, I just won't read it. What you update is yourrrrrrr business. I'll give your Fantasy story a go, though :)
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KrystineKercher

starspeeder, I saw where you posted your blurb on the Fantasy Share Your Work thread. You wanted some feedback, & I'm happy to discuss it with you! (I hope it's ok to reply to you here)
          
          I think you've made a great start!
          
          I'd recommend editing as follows:
          
          Inside Cover [Synapses (sp is 'synopsis'; but, this is really a blurb or teaser.)]: 
          
          Wren Duval was something that most of her peers weren’t[--(replace with a ':')] content. (Great hook!)
          
          [But (Delete!)]as [add: 'a'] girl who had grown up in France during the Middle Ages, isolated from almost everyone, she couldn’t possibly know how lucky she was.  (Great sentence!)
          
          All that she knew was that she was happy. (good, good...)
          
          [Unfortunately, the only constant in life is change.(Delete to tighten up your blurb & give it more impact.)] 
          
          In the months leading up to her 16th birthday, her happiness begins to fade as secrets [she didn’t mind staying secret begin to (? Delete)] unravel (add words: 'her world'). 
          
          [Suddenly (Delete!)] thrust out of the only world she’s ever known and on the run from something she never believed existed,  (awesome hook!)
          
          Wren [starts to wish that she’s not (replace with: 'wishes she doesn't have to be')] the person she’s destined to be. (another great hook!)
          
          If you make these changes, then your blurb should read:
          
          Inside Cover Blurb:  Wren Duval was something most of her peers weren't: content! As a girl who grew (another edit) up in France during the Middle Ages, isolated from almost everyone, she couldn't possibly know how lucky she was. All that she knew was that she was happy. In the months leading up to her 16th birthday, her happiness fades (another edit) as secrets unravel her world. Thrust out of the only world she's ever known and on the run from something she never believed existed, Wren wishes she doesn't have to be the person she's destined to be.
          
          Writing blurbs and teasers can be both fun and frustrating, but I hope I've taken some of the scariness out of it for you.

StarSpeeder

Thank you SO much! You have no idea how much this means to me. I tried my best to fix my blurb, but I still might be missing some stuff. I'm really really really grateful. Everything you said is sooo true, and I'm glad you took the time to type that all out!
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GythaLodge

I've just seen all your amazing voting on The Fragile Tower and wanted to say the biggest THANK YOU!! I can't tell you how much it means to know that you're reading through and enjoying it enough to vote. Plus taking the time too. :-)
          
          I hope you continue to enjoy it. I'll be uploading Chapter 28 today, and then I have a schedule of each Friday and Monday per week, so there isn't too long to wait. (Except for last week when I was late because I was ill, but I promise it's an exception and not the rule...!!)
          
          If you have any thoughts, I'd love to hear them. And if you are willing to vote on any other chapters, it would be just amazing, but there's no pressure as you've already helped a lot. :-)
          
          I've followed you, too, since I think really supportive readers need a few fans too to say thank you!!!
          
          Gytha
          
          xxx