Outsider (Story about Camp Halfblood)

The Original Idea

I am beginning to take the time to re-edit all of my stories on Wattpad to ensure that the plot is deep, as well as put together smoothly. Now this story wasn't preplanned on paper, but I had my ideas in my head for weeks before I began to write it out. The original story line has major differences than what I have created and posted. I thought it would be interesting for you to see how much ideas can change and create a whole different story.

Now as I re-edit, if you find something that doesn't seem right, please tell me so I can change it to better fit the plot.

I hope you enjoy!

1. Mia was originally thought to get together with Leo.

I changed this because the more I wrote, the interested I became in making this romance true. I'm not fond of predicting Rick Riordan's work, so I decided to let Leo find a girl through his actual story line.

2. The prophecy dream and the secret map.

I was going to somehow tie Mia into the Seven, but decided against it because it would end up causing too much extra drama into the story and I really wanted to focus on camp life through a demigod. We have all read about demigods and quests, so I thought that it would be best to keep Mia at camp and have her and the other protagonists find trouble there.

3. Mia and Clairrse.

Those two were going to be closer friends throughout the story, but they have different interests and the story line around Clairrse would've been too serious. I wanted a light hearted story with humorous scenarios. If I had kept them closer, then Mia would've been more involved with the war and that wasn't very realistic to the novels. I wanted to keep my story my own, but also make sure it didn't surpass the actual series' events.

4. The war.

I was going to write about the Romans fighting the Greeks at Camp Halfblood, and I can't remember how long I had this idea, but I had it long enough to add in the old Civil War map and weird Roman dreams. However, as much as I wanted to write it, I was getting no where near that point and I wasn't going to write an extra twenty chapters to get to it. By that point, the story has gone on way too long and the audience will lose interest. So I scratched that and ended the story too abruptly in order to keep myself from boring readers.

5. This story was suppose to end with a cliff hanger.

Originally (and one of the longest held ideas) I wanted to have the fight and have Mia involved in it. I was going to write it that she began to be over whelmed, Will, Pollux, and the others were too held down with their own injuries or conflicts to help Mia, and that she'd fight on until either A: did her madness thing to confuse the Romans or B: did the madness thing to help the camp but drain herself of energy just as a new wave of Romans marched in. Then it would've ended something like this:

It hurt to move, my arms felt numb and I watched as my weapons slipped my fingers. I looked up to see a fresh wave of Romans march forward. One came up to me and brought his sword back.

I closed my eyes and heard someone shout, "Mia!" in fear from afar.

When I opened them, the blade came down on me.

I let the darkness take over me.

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I would like to thank everyone who has read this story and has enjoyed it. I hope you keep supporting it and take a look at my other works. Thank you all so much.

xx oceanstars