The Shit That Pisses Me Off

My First <3

Otayyyy Guyss!

How y'all sexy smexy selves doin'?

GOOD!?

Then YAY! If not then by the end of this you should feel fine.

So I have been on Wattpad for a while now, but it has been of late since my writing has seriously improved. At first I didn't give my all in my writing in my opinion. I feel that I could have done better in my first book I wrote (which is no longer up here, I took it down like two years ago). 

Also since it may seem to some that I bash stories, in my opinion, this is not the case. I merely critique and for the stories I do bash I WRITE THEM HOES! Like all them examples I give y'all, I write them. As an exemplary tactic to show you all what NOT to do in ANY story (unless you writing a play then that's different).

But to show you all that I'm a human being just like anyone else, I wanna show y'all my first Wattpad post. This was the official first chapter of my book Passion, Pain & Pleasure, spelled just like that. At this time I was mostly influenced by other books that I'd read, which were all grammatically incorrect might I add; this book was written because I'd never heard of a book like this(plot wise), although Wattpad now seems to be filled with them, this story type was completely new to me. 

So here is my OFFICIAL first story unedited, and absolutely nothing has been changed since I wrote it.

Jamie:

"FUCK YOU" I said as her and her husband walked through the door.

"I'm sorry baby I didn't mean for any of this to happen like this"

"Shut the hell up i don't wanna hear your goddamn voice Nathan", I replied with fury.

" Jaime baby she mean'nt nothing to me and I thought we were over this by now".

"We were until you let this bitch come and work for you again".

" Like I said before Jae the company sent her to be my receptionist because Karla was on leave to have her baby and this is the end of your petty, child-like bullshitand this conversation is now over", he hollered.

"Nigga how in the fuck you gone tell me this conversation is over shut the fuck up", i replied to him.

" What the fuck did you just say" he said with anger in his voice.

I rolled my eyes and started up the stairs of the mansion.

" What the fuck did you just say Jay" he said once again.

I stopped in my tracks and replied " I said " and before I could finish he slapped me on my ass and drug me up the stairs by my waist to the bedroom....

Nathan POV:

I was gettin really tired of her with this bullshit I done already told this woman I sorry and i ain't never gonna cheat again but she don't belive me. So then when she told me to shut the fuck up and had that attitude I took her ass up the staris to show her who's boss.

Jaime POV:

He body slammed me to the bed ripped off his shirt and repeated " I asked you who in the fuck is you talkin to woman".

I stared at him like he was stupid to piss him off even more than he already was. I got my mouth ready to say something smart but before I could he ripped off my brand new Versace dress and my bra and panties and moved his head in between my legs and started eating me out.

My mind was telling me to hit him but I just could not move my arm to do it cause it felt so good. He stuck his tounge in me and pushed it in deeper, then he moved back to sucking on my clit. I tried so hard to hold it in and not give him the satisfaction but I couldn't and I came all over his face. He then looked up at me and said.

"Now I want you to say you sorry"

"Fuck you nigga" I told him.

I knew he was mad now cause his face turned red. He unbuckled his pants and without thought he shoved his 11 inches all into me. I yelled at the size that i would never get used to and let him pound inside of me.

"Oh shit" I cried out.

"Oh you like this huh " he said back.

I yelled again as he pushed in harder. I grabbed his arms and held him tightly as I then had an orgasm.

"oww baby stop please" I begged but he did not only to repond by going harder in me.

He got out of me and rolled over I then tried to sit up but out of the blue he grabbed my waist and bent me over the bed and re-entered from behind. I yelled in pain as he continuously pounded me non-stop. He started to go a little slower and the pain went away, I could feel my moisture running down my legs.

My body felt so limp and help less as he carried me to the overly sized master bathroom. He got me in the shower and started to wash my body. I felt a little bad for saying those things and accusing home earlier, I had to make it up to him. I then.......

Ion think yall should see what else I wrote yall ain't ready for that. LOL

Plz remember to vote & comment!!!

Love

~mzmari4eva

I couldn't even read this shit, the first sentence irked my soul. First off what POV is it in? It said "I then" it went off into an omniscient I'm guessing? I'on even know my damn self. I do remember that at the time I wasn't sure if I was supposed to add in a space in between the word when I add quotation marks. This is most definitely my worst piece ever! Also lack of detail, and all around it's stupid. I would give more information but I would rather choke than read that again. I couldn't even get past the first sentence. So as you guys can tell I have shitty work too. 

The plot for this story was that Jaime's father was running for governor in Georgia (where they live) her husband is a cheater, obviously, and her sister  is like a daddy's girl who always got what she wanted. Her sister who is like twenty something still lives at home and is a party girl and a bad influence for the press. So the mother kicks the sister out and the sister has to go and stay with Jaime and her promiscuous husband. In Nathan's defense, he really wanted to get right with his wife and apologize; her sister is just an evil bitch.

So I digress once more. I am human like everyone else, but the difference is that I actually learn from my mistakes. Do you?

After I wrote this story I had a second book (that I took down because Wattpad deleted three chapters out of if for no reason!). The name of my second book is 'He's Married So What?'

It's still in my drafts, but y'all want a sneak peak next chapter? 

It got some bomb ass sex scenes, I just had to say that lmao. But the sneak peak won't be any sex though, I don't think y'all want one. BUt if you do comment and I'll decide.