Sly Cooper and the Gang in: Rewriting (On Hitaus)

I need help

So I need your help!

Those who are reading this. Could you please comment here ANY grammar mistakes, or advice that I could use to improve this story? That would be really helpful!

School is getting on my nerves, and its getting on the way of my writing! But I had a fail-safe just in case that happended. I completed in total of 5 extra chapters!

Also please vote on this book! So that others may see it and enjoy it!

I love you all!

~Motsril! S2