Critiqued Book [closed for awhile]

Taming a Psycho by SeicoLynx

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Requested/Author:SeicoLynx
Age:16
Gender:Female
Story Title: Taming a Psycho

🔎 Book Cover:

The book cover is nice. Pinakita dun yung Nerd na Main Character. Pero I noticed the four shadow persons thingy. Anong purpose nun? Don't get me wrong okay! Pero It seems na hindi nakatulong yung apat na shadows na yun sa kung anong nilalaman ng story mo! May I suggest, pwede mo siya lagyan ng Background Guy sa likod, para ipakita yung Mafia or the company or yung mga ganung case! Get it ? Tapos the nerd. Medyo simple yung nerd! Make it more attentionable (attentionable ? May ganun? HAHHAHA) got my point ? Tska yung color background! Medyo ibigay mo sya dun sa main pictures. Para mas nakakahooked. Ang cover kasi ay muka ng story mo, Yung tipong mapapaisip na agad yung mga readers mo kung anong aasahan nilang basahin at kapapanabikan. Ganun! Overall! Maganda!

Cover Point/s: 7/10

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🔎 Title:

I love the title. Though, it's mysterious! Napaisip nga ako kung anong klaseng Tamed ! Medyo unfamiliar word kasi. Sa pag gawa ng Title, iyan ang kailangan. Yung mapapaisip ang mga readers mo. Halimbawa katulad ng Story ko which is Cryptic Girl. Maybe Readers will think kung anong klaseng girl yun. Na ano yung cryptic ? Ikaw ? Napaisip ka din noh ? Comment inline kung OO ! HAHAHHA ! That's what I meant to say. Gets ? Over all! Okay naman siya. I like the title. Good job!

Title Point/s: 8/10

🔎 Desciption

Yan ! Sa description. Gusto ko yung description mo. It hooked me up! Pero I've noticed the place of the text. Alam mo yun ? Yung pagiging compacted nya ? I mean, pwede mong lagyan ng mga space. Para maging mas kaaya-aya basahin. Tska yung grammars nya, pati yung mga bantas, mga contractions. Which is babanggitin konsa technecalities mamaya. Sa Description ko yun nakita! Tska yung mga pampagulong words like sinabi mo ng "BEING A NERD" then sinabi mo pa na "Pretending to be a nerd" which is di namin maintindihan kung nag pe-pretend lang ba sya o nerd talaga sya! And one more thing! Napansin ko rin sa description mo yung Three Types of Point of Views: First, Second and Third person. Sa una kasi, ginamit mo yung Being a nerd, which is First person. Tapos bigla mong ginamit yung word na HER which is third person. Nagiging magulo lang. pero ayos lang naman minsan na pagsamasamahin ang types ng POV's but you should be careful placing it. Dapat hindi lang basta maganda. It should be precise and accurate. See my point?

As your reader, I've love to suggest my version of Taming Psycho Description Summary!

" Pretending to be a Nerd is not easy.

Bullies, Bitches, Gossips, and others around are disgusted in my Face.

But do they really know what they up to ?
Do they really know who's behind those glasses who they disgusted with?