Your cover is good, but I don't think it stands out as much as it could. Personally, I like the picture but the font and colour of the title are not very revelling. I would definitely make it stand out more.
Your description is short yet very powerful. At this point, I still don't know what it's hidden inside, but your description raises some of my curiosity...
Ok... I wasn't expecting this! Love the concept, and can't wait to read more. (and just a little side note...when you want to reply to comments on your book you need to hit that little arrow on the right side right next to the comment, otherwise, no one will get the notification of your reply).
First I wasn't expecting this, and secondly, this book doesn't belong in random, so I'm reviewing as a dark romance if you don't mind.
Ok so considering what I just read, the book cover doesn't suit your story at all, you need something indulged and seductive to match the story. Your description also needs more information than what you gave. You should make it interesting and mysteriously hot.
When it comes to grammar, I noticed a few mistakes, nothing that would make me stop from reading any book, but I would suggest for you to consider some editing at some point, just to make it flawless.
The plot is clearly sexual and I might think that BDSM might be somehow relatable as well. (Although Mr Grey is an angel compared to Keith...).
You can clearly describe the steamy scenes very comfortably, but I was lacking the emotional side of the story. I think you could have dug deeper into each character, so it could make your readers connect more with the story and create a balance between the sexual and emotional sides of the story. When we read a book so sexually strong as yours, we need an anchor to justify some of the actions that we can't or won't accept in our real life.
Keith is obsessed with Isla, he beats her and tortures her for his own pleasure, I'm left wondering if there is any good in him, what are his reasons? It's hard to connect with such character if I see no reason to hold on to the motives behind the scenes.
I also thought that you moved rather quickly into the story. You rushed through vital moments that would place things into a different perspective. I felt like I couldn't even connect with Isla because there was not much to her character development before the "relationship" with Keith began on chapter 2. You could have paced the story a little bit slower, build up the characters more extensively and fold things a little more smoothly.
Mature book is supposed to indulge their readers, take them to another world and raise excitement but I was lacking the excitement part because the violent scenes had no conclusion which you will get from giving that emotional support to the story.
Overall I think this book has potential, I just honestly think that you have to develop your characters and plot a bit more because right now the sexual part of it is dominating the whole story, and you need some kind of balance.
I wish you all the best :)
I would rate this book 3 out of 5
I apologize for any typos. Thank you for allowing us to review your book and we wish you and your bookie nothing but the very best💖 claudushka
