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《Kiara》Bits 'N' Pieces

Reviewer: Ree_Kiara
Written by: waterandfire_xox

• COVER AND TITLE: 07/10

The cover to be honest looked quite plain and simple and there wasn't anything eye catching as such. Here to mention the title seemed good though a bit more of creativity can be used to frame up a better one. Try for looking a graphic help shop either from the community or as per your taste to get a better cover for your book.

• BLURB: 07/10

The basic outline of the blurb was apt giving a rough idea regarding the characters of Lexi and Steve but a bit more was revealed than what was actually needed. Also the question that why just can't Steve leave Lexi could have been framed in a different way thus making it a bit more creative. Blurb is the most important part of a book after cover and title and it decides whether the reader would carry forward with the story or not. So you need to be exceptionally creative when framing it out.

• OVERALL PLOTLINE: 08/10

Though quite simple and common still it has a gripping sense and this deserves parise. Lexi's punishment and Steve's confession in the car is where it all starts but what I liked the most and was unexpected was Vass' backstory. To add further in that same chapter the last few lines deserves special appreciation.

• GRAMMAR: 09/10 marks

Well, so found nothing as such huge number of mistakes in this part. There's a few mistakes which can be corrected.

• CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: 09/10

This part was done taking great care. From Vass taking a stand for Lexi to Steve confessing his heart out are the instances when the character graphs got their shape.

• SETTING: 08/10
• DESCRIPTION OF SCENES: 08/10

A “fast paced” doesn't mean to lack descriptions of the place where a particular scene is taking place. Also to add, the first person description of scenes at places seemed too much than required. This is where you need to work and fix it a bit. Other than that it's all completely fine.

• ORIGINALITY:  08/10
• EMOTIONAL ATTACHMENT: 08/10

Yes, the storyline didn’t lack in originality in anyway. The way you presented made it quite different and intriguing. At places the dragging of narration was a bit turn off but that can be corrected once it's edited.

• OVERALL ENJOYMENT: 08/10

MESSAGE: Thank you for choosing me as your reviewer. Definitely I enjoyed reading your piece of work. Mistakes and flaws are a part of anything that we do and it helps us in the process of learning but let that not hinder the joy you find when writing the upcoming chapters. And there's a request from my part, once you give your book to review please refrain from making changes in that period of time. You can reach out to me anytime you feel.

TOTAL: 80/100

Love,
Kiara