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《Blazé》Born

Reviewer: Blazé -taeyze-
Client: rseSimon
Title: Twice Born
Review type: Public

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[PS: Reviewed till Chapter 13]

Cover: 2/5
It's not attractive. It's rather plain. It'd be better to add some editing elements and make it look pretty. The fonts are good enough though. Rather the image in the intro chapter could be a better cover for the book. The cover ought to give mysterious and magical vibes.

Title: 4/5
Suitable title, I guess. I can relate it to the plot, and it doesn't give away the plot, good thing there! It has a mysterious vibe that made me curious about the story, and well, it's attractive.

Blurb: 4/5
The content is good enough and is somewhat enticing. But the prsesntation is lacking, which makes it boring. Try using fonts and symbols a little bit to make it pretty to the eye.

Plot: 5/5
Amazing! I definitely love it. The genre is just my style and I loved the way everything unfolds. Gods, magic, and stuff is quite enticing.

Execution of the plot: 4/5
It's quite commendable. I enjoyed how you unfold the plot and characters slowly with feels. But at times, it does lack some vibes and aura.

The idea of the story: 5/5
The idea is interesting and very creative, I must say. Setting up things so fantastical isn't an easy thing. To come up with background of everything takes much effort. You did a great job!

Originality: 4.5/5
It's not a common story/plot, on Wattpad at least, as far as and as much as I've read. It's a good plot with it's own twists so I guess reading a book like this will be an enjoyment to the audience. It'll keep them engaged and hooked.

Writing Style: 4/5
The writing style is good enough. But I think you should refrain from putting those brackets to add additional info; rather merge it within the story. Narration is the style to go with in this genre of books. You did it prettily too. Just a few issues with exposition and other elements at some places, but apart from that, it's all good. You've maintained the formality and casuality very well too.

Grammar & Vocabulary: 8/10
There are a few typos and grammatical errors such as wrong tense, or sentence formation problems. They all seem small mistakes made in rush while writing, nothing serious. A proofread would fix these small things. The vocabulary is fairly good, but can be improved.

Presentation: 3/5
Although the story is great, you need to make it presentable to the audience to catch their eye. Textually, the presentation is nice. But visually, there isn't much except the banners at the end, which don't even match with the cover. Try using some gif dividers, and matching banners.

Flow & Pace: 4/5
It's flawless. Everything is fine and good  going. Though sometimes it does feel a little confusing and perhaps enough time is not provided to the scene. Go through the story once again and you'll know iit.

Structure: 4/5
Sometimes you've suddenly changed the scene and it's about how they met or something additional or as a filler of the story. Don't randomly put it there, you can just give small pieces of info while you're at the plot itself. Other than that, I think everything else was perfectly framed.

Literary Skills: 9/10
You've used some skills really well. The exposition is a bit lacking but other aspects of literary devices are beautifully used, such as humor, sarcasm, dreams and such. Some rather idiomic phrases could be used.

Characters: 5/5
Oh, the characters are perfect! So well-built. I could understand and feel as each character. They have solid stories and purposes of themselves. They are very admirable. All of them.

Emotions & Development: 9/10
Even through the narration, the major focus is on Olamide, and I can say that yes, I felt his emotions. His fear, disappointment, fury, everything. And also the way his character develops. Development is a stage that takes efforts and time and creativity at the peak. And you've done it well. However, at some points, it's a little difficult to understand the character and why he is acting the way he does.

Reader's Enjoyment: 5/5
Personally, this is the type of book I'd want to read again. I just love everything about it. It was really enjoyable and I was immersed into it so much. I'm glad I could read it!

Impression: 4/5
My first impression of the book from the cover and blurb was not so great. It lacks creativity. But as I got into the story, I just loved it. You just need to work on the first glance impression of your book.

Total: 83.5/100

Strengths and Weakness: The strength is definitely the solid plot and amazing characters. I also feel that your writing style could be a great advantage with some amendments. The weakness, like I've mentioned before is the visual presentation.

Final Note: You've been a writer for quite a long time now, and yes your efforts can be seen. You did all for something and that can be felt here. This story is really great and I believe you can achieve good audience on this as long as you fix the things I mentioned. And don't be hopeless because you are not being recognised just yet. Keep working for yourself and you'll get the fruit one day! I hope my review helped you and that I didn't offend you in any way. If I did, I apologize since that wasn't my intention. Thank you!