Realistic Fantasies Awards

🪻RESULTS : Beat Heartbreaking Chapter🪻

So, here are the results of the ‘Best Heartbreaking Chapter’ category. Congratulations to those who win, and congratulations to those too who participated. I hope nobody gets demotivated. These types of opportunities help us to improve more.

➷ Please take the judge's opinions as advices. Don't disrespect your judge.

➷ Don't unfollow the Judge, the community or the host. It will lead to your entry in the blacklist.

JUDGE : Myrddin ( mxtsuro )

I would like to thank the judge for such detailed and honest reviews that will definitely help the contestants to improve.

“Reviews”

The First Draft by ineedsomesleeptoday (36/50)

o Character: 7/10
o Emotional Impact: 7/10
o Realistic Element: 7.5/10
o Writing Style: 7/10
o Overall Impression: 7.5/10

Review: Greetings, my name is Myrddin, your humble troubadour of Avalon! In the twelfth chapter of "The First Draft" by the author ineedsomesleeptoday, we are presented with an intricate and emotionally charged narrative. The chapter commences by introducing us to the protagonist, Spencer, as he arrives at his humble abode, which he shares with his brother, John. The initial interaction between the two siblings is portrayed in a manner that reflects the familiar dynamics often observed among real-life brothers and sisters. The chapter begins by shedding light on the complex emotional landscape of Spencer, whose disposition is tainted by a deep-seated melancholy. This pervasive sadness is later revealed to be a result of a traumatic memory involving the tragic demise of his three closest friends: Mike, Jayden, and Sarah. The story then delves into the unfolding of events as a minor dispute arises among the four characters, including Spencer, during a celebratory gathering following a significant event for their band. Spencer's announcement of his acceptance into an international school for higher studies triggers a sense of unease and concern among his best friends and bandmates, who fear the implications this decision might have on the future of their group. This underlying tension serves as the catalyst for a series of events that culminate in a tragic car accident, claiming the lives of all involved, except for Spencer himself. The aftermath of this devastating incident has left him with an overwhelming sense of self-reproach, as he continues to blame himself for the untimely deaths of his late companions, referring to himself as a "murderer." The author's ability to weave together the complex emotions and intricate relationships of the characters in this chapter is truly commendable. The narrative effectively captures the essence of human nature and the societal influences that shape our lives, allowing readers to empathize with the characters and their circumstances. While the structure of the chapter is well-crafted, it could have benefited from a more in-depth exploration of the setting and the use of vivid descriptions to evoke stronger emotions in the reader. In summary, the chapter demonstrates an impressive command of the English language and presents an engaging narrative structure. Nevertheless, the incorporation of additional descriptive elements could have significantly heightened the emotional resonance and contributed to a more immersive reading experience for the
audience. Concurrently, I think improving the story's pace can lead to a smoother narrative progression. This would allow for a more in-depth exploration of the chapter's context without creating a hurried atmosphere.
An instance where implementing the "show, don't tell" rule of writing could enhance a narrative is: