Agent is X follow the story of a very capable spy accepting his most dangerous job do date. Will he succeed?
Honestly, I'm definititely not a lover of the spies genre.
Which is better in this case, because the author has asked me to be as brutal as I possibly can and not loving the book too much will allow me to be more objective.
On the other hand, if you're a spies lover, you're in for a treat.
Positive
1. Writing
Forget grammatical mistakes, slow rythm, sentences long enough to occupy a paraghraph, the writing here comes straight to the point.
To be fair, it's not perfect, either. I'll get into it later.
2. Worldbuilding
The book's arena is quite simple, even if not boring. The mechanism behind the job are described punctually, briefly, clearly. Perfect.
3. Images!
Guys! Guys! Finally! Someone. Used. Images. And sounds!
Love you.
Neutral points
1. Alarm clock starter.
Eeehh.
It's a choice.
You haven't done it bad, after all. You inserted his thoughts, his routine, DID NOT put a mirror scene... well played.
I still personally hate alarm clocks starters.
Negative points
This is not a bad book!
These are long because the author requested it.
1. First chapter/main character
I understand the author is not a newbie. Therefore, this is most likely a choice, not a mistake.
I decided to put it into "negative" because I've found it a huge mistake as a reader.
The main character has no personality.
For the entire first chapter, we get hints of things that annoy him, no more.
Obviously, being him a spy with no name, I'm guessing this is a choice to make the reader feel the frustration of everyone around Agent X, not being able to understand him.
But as a reader, if I can't see him, love him, be fond of him, I simply don't give a shit about him.
And why would I read a book about someone I don't care for?
2. Short sentences
I've noticed this trend kinda wore off in the latest chapters, but the first few chapters are always the most important.
Short sentences are good, for a screenplay.
For a book, or a wattpad story, I'd suggest to make them longer, because the rhythm has to feel like a song. It's obviously a virtuosity, but I'm adding it here because I belive you can achieve that.
Try reading your script out loud, listening to the sound.
Too many shorts sentences oblige the reader's mind to reset at every point, making the read slower, heavier and harder.
IN GENERAL:
This feels like a mission impossible movie.
It is well made, adventurous, fun and sexy.
If you're a fan of the genre, you are going to fall perfectly in love.
YOU ARE READING
Reviews and recommendation
Non-FictionStory editor here, reading and reviewing stories because this is honestly my natural environment :) As such, I don't use a voting system! Check out the first two chapters for more details. Have fun! cover by @lightmage1
