Reviewer: DeviledPotato
Story: The Knight's Debt by Nirvanah1998
Presentation: Your presentation was pretty good. Your title was great and your cover was interesting, I just felt like you could've done more with the cover. Your description had some grammar errors but it still caught my attention.
Introduction/prologue: Your prologue confused me a bit. I found the wording off in some places and I didn't really understand what was going on. I think it could use some revising but overall it wasn't bad
Character Development: I don't really have enough information to fill this part out, but I found the characters personalities a bit cliche. So far we hardly know Kaden and Maya has only one major personality trait so she seems simple minded.
Grammar/Wording: Your grammar and wording need some work. Some parts were confusing and I struggled to keep up with what was actually going on.
Overall: Overall, I think with some editing and revising you have something going. I would suggest in the future getting another review done when you have at least 8-10 parts posted so it can be more accurate.
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