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10| Dream Girls Series Book One:Demi, the Simple Lass

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Critic: MoonDiaries_
Author: jeanmirren

DEMI: THE SIMPLE LASS

•BOOK COVER:

If I will rate your book cover out of 5, bibigyan ko siya ng 4. Una, gusto ko na hindi ka masyadong nagfocus sa detail. Rather, nagfocus ka sa emotion. Yung iba kasi, they tend to focus sa accuracy ng plot (which is good din naman) but they forgot the real essence of book cover. Truth be told, it has to tell something. Yung sa'yo, it has accuracy with the title— as it says, "Demi" which is obviously a girl. In like manner, nando'n din yung accuracy sa vibe ng story. Simple lang siya yet catchy.

Siguro, yung kokompleto sa 5/5, ibibigay ko na lang sa room for improvement. I can see na mas may iiimprove pa 'yung style, especially when it comes sa font. Okay na 'yung font style actually, it's just that, hindi ako gaanong satisfied sa choice of font color. If you can, pwede ka'ng gumamit ng color na alam mo'ng mas magiging legible for the readers. Hindi naman kailangang super vivid, but I guess you have to give more emphasis sa title especially doon sa nakalagay sa bandang itaas. Though hindi 'yon ang main title ng story, it is still important na mabasa siya ng makakakita. Keep in mind, kapag na-i-print ang story mo into physical book sa isang publishing house, wala ng nakalagay na text under the book cover para malaman ng mga readers na "Ah, ito pala ang title" just like in Wattpad. Kapag na-publish na ang gawa mo, sa cover na lang sila magre-rely para mabasa ang title. So to avoid kunot-noo from your readers, make sure na madaling mabasa kaagad ang text sa book cover.

Tip:

This one is optional. Kung gusto mo lang naman. But in my point of view kasi, sobrang attractive ng mga covers na mayroong undertone. Kumbaga, may meaning. 'Yung tipong mapipilitan talaga ang mga readers na mag-analyize kung ano ang gustong iimply ng nakikita nila at bakit iyon ang naging cover ng story. You can use that as another point.

•SYNOPSIS:

Now, let me give an honest review with this one. And 'pag sinabi ko'ng honest, as in, ang perfect na niya para sa'kin! Take it from me. Hindi mo naman talaga kailangang maging multilingual to classify yourself as a good writer. Nakaka-amaze how you put them into words, 'yung pagiging organize ng sequence, everything! Nagustuhan ko rin na hindi mo masyadong ni-reveal ang mga great turns ng story. Mukha lang siyang typical na plot for some, but since nag-iwan ka ng some questions sa dulo, sapat na 'yon para ma-convince ang readers na ituloy ang pagbabasa at masagot ang questions all by themselves.

Tip:

Just what I've said, napakalaking factor na nag-iwan ka ng question sa dulo ng synopsis mo. Isa siya, actually, sa mga effective techniques. Pero isa pa sa mai-susuggest ko, you can also use foreshadowing sa last part. Katulad ng ginagawa ng iba. Let me give you some examples:

"It's almost perfect, not until..."

"Until a catastrophe came and her almost-fairytale-like life fell to pieces..."

"And a tragedy came..."

"Their love is indeed strong... or so she thought?"

"Hanggang sa isang gabi..."

"Kung alam niya lang..."

Or any line na tipong mapapatanong ang mga readers ng "Hala, bakit?", "Anong nangyari?" and things like that.

•PROLOGUE:

I was actually surprised. Hindi ko inexpect na third person's point of view pala ito. In my own preference kasi ha, mas na-fe-feel ko talaga ang first person's POV. Well, that's me— being subjective. May kaniya kaniya naman kasi tayong preference.