@littlesilverwren
First I want to mention I did like the option of audio text reading.
The blurb/description was kind of short but I think readers get the jist of it. That thing you added as part of a trigger warning is much appreciated.
I didn't pin down many errors so some light proofreading wouldn't hurt. The dialog seems realistic up to a point as if this would happen in the real world. It is a nice job overall of keeping the text in past tense, it can be difficult for most writers. (myself included.)
Although I don't understand the need for the character's names as chapter titles. You're writing from a third-person point of view, not a first-person person pov of each character. So I just thought it was odd, but I understood how each chapter leaned into each character's part of the book. I do find it easiest to write my books in the third-person pov so I did enjoy that anyway.
I would've liked more separate dialog at some spots, but that's just me. Readers can follow along on who is saying what just fine right now. The length of your chapters is just right in my opinion. I think the shorter ones keep your readers wanting more, as I try to do in my books. I loved how you embodied a talking cat. And your descriptive words are fantastic. Keep up the good work!
-Empress🐧
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