@lostlovefairy
The cover is cute, but not to my personal taste, seems a bit cartoony but young readers would find it appealing. The words are perfectly clear though, which is always a good sign. Your blurb could be vamped up, it is a bit repetitive.
This part:
'Tropes, Brother's best friend, Forbidden love, Height difference, Forced proximity, Age gap (6 years)'
I think it is irrelevant inside the blub/not needed. Your story itself should explain all of this information throughout the chapters naturally. The excerpt is great!
As I started reading I noticed the sequence of the chapters is off order. The 'awards won' page should be the first chapter in your book, the exposure is great! Then the mood board; next should be the prologue ->so on with chapters. Just a tip, like it or not :-)
I think with using a second language as a multilingual writer it's best to have a full list of translated words at the end of each chapter for readers instead of the words in both languages next to each other in the same sentence. I am also one so I'm trying to do this myself. The third-person point of view is my favorite so I enjoyed that. However, I feel you need to lean into one person at a time for each character's thoughts or make them italics so they are separate from the overall story.
The next few chapters were a bit fast-paced but not in a bad way. Grammar wise you could do some proofreading, there were little to no spelling mistakes. All in all the storyline is good, it is best suited for a young audience.
-Empress🐧
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