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S3 | Ika-labing Apat ng Pebrero

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Author: morreyna
Critic: GGeraldinous

Note: I am no professional regarding this task, but I did my best for it. Hoping it would be constructive for you and not the other way around LOL.

PS. Sorry, natagalan. Natiempuhan mo ang tamad na critic, yours truly; thank you and bow.

| BOOK COVER

First impression: Dark Fantasy ang tema ng story, iyon ang na-i-depina sa book jacket mo. Tapos andoon si girl na nagsasalamin at ang reflection niya is the cursed version of her, nakaka-intriga. Maganda naman ang cover, not to mention gawa ng isang shop. Media manipulation siya. Although, kulang ang font size kaya mahirap basahin ang ilang word content; ang contrast between the font and background is medyo mahina kaya di masyadong visible sa unang scan ng readers.

Suggestion: Emboss or 3D the subtitle. Make the author's name more visible (lakihan ang font size nito at palitan ang kulay ng against the background, nakiblend siya eh). Importante rin namang ma-recognize ng readers ang author's name para kapag natiempuhan nila ang iba mong story sa recommendation sections ay mahihikayat sila (reader's marketing and stuffs like that). Mas maganda rin kapag mas nilakihan ang crack doon sa salamin (adds a mystery vibe for your story).

| TITLE

Impression: Scan the title and I can infer that its plot is all about romantical things like this and that. Typical and not so catchy to make me choose it out from thousand stories here at wattpad. Though the good thing is, minsan wala namang pakialam ang readers sa title (as long as maganda ang book cover n' blurb mo xD). One more thing, maganda namang through the title pa lamang ay alam na namin kung anong medium ang ginamit sa narration—Filipino, the formal one! And most importantly, may relevance siya sa story, malaki ang koneksiyones niya sa plot.

Suggestion: Idagdag mo ang subtitle (if subtitle nga ba ang "Ang Sumpa ng Pagmamahal" na nasa book cover) sa title mo; pang-hook. Or if not, consider revising, like, Sumpa ng Pebrero etc. 

| BLURB

Impression: No comment. You have yar own writing style, I get it, and I must say job-well-done for this (if you call this a job though, haha). Andoon na si main character, the conflict, and the teaser. Nakuha mo ako sa last statement mo, iyong ". . . tuklasin ang pagmamahalang binalot ng dilim at kung paano nila bibigyang liwanag ang matutuklasang lihim.

| PROLOGUE

You opened the story through a scene, I like that. You established the setting through describing the place kung saan nangyayari ang komosyon; nabanggit rin kung anong oras which is gabing malamig and thorough described kaya may imagery nang nabubuo sa utak ng readers.

• Just that, look at this: