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Element

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by NotTalkedAbout

I am, in no way, a professional. I give review on the basis of a reader and not as a writer. Please excuse the mistakes.

Book: Element.

Author: ChandlerHinton

So here we go,

Title: Title is good, but I suggest changing it. Maybe not now. Or maybe later. Element suits the story a lot, but its common. There are many stories with Element or Elemental academy and all. Title is not a final thing. You can wait till the story ends and give it a perfect and another suiting title.

Blurb: Here is the screenshot of your blurb:

It is perfect. This kind of blurb attracts readers and you have aced it. ;)

Chapter 1: The chapter is nice. Its informative with not too many descriptions but no less descriptions either. Your paragraphs flow properly without any hindrance. I like where the story is currently going. I can't say much about the pace, but it seems normal.

Grammar: Your grammar is good. There were barely any mistakes. As a reviewer, you made my job difficult but I managed to find some. Look at the screenshot below:

See the underlined word 'became'? It should be 'becomes' as you are using present tense as your primary story tense, I guess, and subtract the ever in the next line as well.

See another screenshot:

See the underlined part? I don't understand that one. I don't know what to make of it. Is it 'when their watch (with any adjective)/ it is long gone to have it sent for.' You haven't written anything after 'for' either. Can you explain this one if it is right?

Other than that, I found no mistakes. Excellent job!

Characters: I can't say much about them as I just read the first chapter.

My advice: I got none other than the title one. :p

My views: I can't say I have many, but the book and the idea of it seems nice enough so far. I can surely say that I can read it once more chapters are updated! So keep going! I wish you all the luck for your book. :)

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