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I rate this cover a 10/10. The details centering this cover are amazing. Here are some of the things I love about this cover.
I like all the different fonts that are found on this cover. I like that you featured every main character on the cover not just Lou Ellen. I love how the main character seem to pop off the page into reality.
While Hecate seems to bore stuck to the page like glue. Finally, I love how Hecate's figure on the cover seems to be glitching. It makes a really cool detail.
Description: Lou Ellen is terrible at Incantations. Being a child of Hecate, there are two things you must be good at: Controlling the Mist and Incantations. Lou Ellen is good with the Mist, but Incantations, well... We already covered that before. But in order to be worthy of Hecate and accepted by the rest of her siblings, Lou Ellen must master the art of Incantations.
When Lou Ellen receives a dream from her mother about a missing relic, Lou Ellen sees this as an opportunity to prove herself worthy to Hecate and her siblings. So she along with Will, Nico, and Cecil venture across the United States on a quest to find Hecate's missing relic before the autumn equinox. But while the four demigods are on this quest, something sinister is trekking behind them, with plans to start complete chaos using this relic.
Full of action and adventure, the demigods now must race against an unknown figure to find Hecate's missing relic before it's too late.
I rate this description a 9/10. The length of your description, meets the standard of how long it should be. I loved your description. I felt like I was reading the back of one of Rick Riordan's books.
You tell us a little about the character and one thing people normally don't do, is saying what was the cause of the whole story.
But you did with When Lou Ellen receives a dream from her mother about a missing relic, Lou Ellen sees this as an opportunity to prove herself worthy to Hecate and her siblings. With that one sentence we were able to read through the lines to figure out Lou Ellen wants to prove herself because her sibling don't believes she worthy to be cabin leader.
Rating: I rate this story a 9/10. Usually with books on here with long chapters or even short. I tend to skip sentences because it just does not catch my interests.
But your story I read every word in every chapter. Lou Ellen's level of sass almost made me have a sass attack. The story just reminded me so much of Rick Riordans book if I didn't read it here and it was an actually published book I would have thought Rick wrote it.
That's how good it was written.
I also love how the stories going slow. What I mean is with stories focusing on minor character it's a complete copy of Percabeth. They give each other nicknames similar to Seaweed Brain and Wise Girl. They also start saying I love you's in the first few chapters.
But with your story it's slow and they are all reluctant to accept their feelings.
I just love that.
One thing to work on: One thing to work on . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
I actually can't find anything to correct you on. So uh, . . . . always remember to re-read you chapter before you publish it and after to find mistakes you may have missed the first time.
I recommend Hecate's revenge to whoever has read PJO and HOO.
