[CLOSED] Helping Hands Critique Journal

02. Roommate Romance

Pinkie's Note: First of all, I would like to apologize for the delay of this review. Masyadong naging busy sa school and 'yong nangyari pa sa Watty app ko. But anyway, here it is now! I would also like to apologize in advance if I'm redacting some scenes and events from your story. Ayoko naman kasing mag-blurt out ng spoilers kasi baka may magbasa ng review na ito na kasalukuyang nagbabasa ng story and well, ma-spoil. So that's all, scroll down now for the review~

IMPORTANT NOTICE:
I am not a professional writer and/or critic. My evaluation and opinion will be based on my observation.

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Author: loveisnotrude
Story: Roommate Romance
Critic: Pinkieditidy
Critique Released: February 05, 2020
Parts Read: 56
Book Status: On going

TITLE
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☑ Simple and easy to understand.

☑ Self-explanatory na ito and you can already predict what the story will be all about, but I was genuinely surprised when I read it because it wasn't really what I was expecting, rather, you exceeded my expectations.

☑ Straight to the point at 'di misleading.

☑ Marketable, catchy at madaling maalala because of the R alliteration (do'n talaga ako na-hook).

☑ Relevant. Honestly, no'ng una ko 'tong nabasa 'di ko masyadong nakita 'yong relevance ng title sa istorya. But when the scenes progressed, napa-"ahh" na lang ako. Wala akong problema sa title so I'mma give you a perfect score.

BOOK COVER
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☑ Simplicity is beauty as the saying goes. Relaxing sa mata 'yong pagiging simple ng cover and honestly, it just adds to the appeal of it.

☑? Great choice of font style and color combinations, however, 'di na gaanong nababasa 'yong pangalan ng author. I suggest that you give the letters a black outline para makita pa rin ito in white background.

BLURB/
PROLOGUE
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O1. Blurb

?? Is it catchy? It is enticing? Will it engage the readers to read further? Honestly speaking, no. It doesn't look like a blurb at all, it looks more like a story review.

?? Where are the main characters? What's the conflict? Ano ang aabangan ko sa istorya? You enumerated important terms which are included in the story, but that's not enough. Maraming istorya ang may life and college struggles, family, friendship, romantic relationship, etc etc, so what makes yours stand out?

Having an effective blurb is essential because this will give your readers a bit of insight about your story - kung tungkol saan ba 'to and what makes it worth reading. All I'm saying is, the author should hook the readers gamit ang blurb. Sell your story to us. Entice us.

O2. Prologue

☑ What a steamy start XD. Although a lot of information has already been blurted out, 'di naman ako against do'n kasi nga exposition 'yon. Wala naman akong gaanong problema sa prologue kasi 'di naman masyadong overwhelming 'yong pam-bombard ng information, pero may napuna pa rin ako which I will discuss later on.

CHARACTERIZATION/
TONE
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☑ Realistic and relatable characters. That's a plus from me.