[CLOSED] Helping Hands Critique Journal

54. Favorite Seven

DISCLAIMER
I am not a professional writer and/or critique in any way. I just want to share my knowledge and help fellow writers to improve and learn. All of my analysis is based on my observation, so feel free to correct me if I misread something.

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Author: miedsey
Story: Favorite Seven
Critic: celestialfairie
Critique Finished: July 30, 2020
Parts Read: 10 parts
Book Status: On-going
Genre: Teen Fiction

TITLE
(4%)

At first, the title didn't sit well with me. I felt like something was missing and there were far better adjectives than favorite. Beloved and dearest among others may work better. At the same time, I was curious about what the 'Seven' meant. Number ba siya? Pangalan ng tao or grupo or is it something else? Initial reaction ko lang iyon upon reading the title, but then I read the story and that is when it made sense.

I liked how you utilized the number and gave it so many meanings. The title earned its name and it is well warranted, so good job, Author!

BOOK COVER
(4%)

The book cover depicts a male portrait, which probably is Seven, the love interest. Malinis tingnan ang cover at hindi masakit sa mata. My only concern is parang hindi angkop ang color palette ng cover sa mismong storya. The book cover emits elegance and poise, white and gold kasi ang gamit. Mahinhin at pure tingnan, kumbaga. Kaya nagulat ako sa mga dialogues ng mga characters kahit may warning na sa description.

Maganda sana kung ma-match ng cover ang tone ng story. Bubbly at maharot ang kwento kaya mas maganda kung colorful at bright din ang cover. Ganyan din naman usually ang formula ng covers for romcom stories, so that's that. Dapat eye-catching at hindi takot na magstand-out.

I should point out rin na medyo malabo at mahirap basahin ang title. You can enlarge the text or perhaps choose another more readable font, if you don't want to change it as a whole.

INTRODUCTION/
BLURB/
PROLOGUE
(9%)