[CLOSED] Helping Hands Critique Journal

50. I Can See Death

DISCLAIMER: 
My critique means no offense to the writer or to the story.  Everything that I will point out here are all for the betterment of your work. I'm not perfect and I commit mistakes as well. Hoping for an open mind to everyone who will read this and an accepting heart from the author who wrote the story that I constructively criticized.

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Author: _ailuros
Story: I Can See Death
Critic: Lovely luckynadine
Critique Finished: July 22, 2020
Parts Read: 20
Book Status: On going
Genre: Paranormal/Mystery/Fantasy

TITLE:
5/5

Maganda ang napili mong pamagat para sa akdang ito. This title justified the plot and the choice of P.O.V. Bukod do'n, catchy ito. Something that will intrigue your readers and something that will provide a very nice plot in their minds. Sakto rin ito sa genre at unique. No'ng nabasa ko ito, gumawa na kaagad ang utak ko ng kung ano-anong posibleng plot na iikot sa genre na kinabibilangan ng akdang ito. And I think that's how an effective title should work.

BOOK COVER:
3/5

I will give this cover a so-so grade. Sakto lang pero hindi naiiba at ganoong angat. I like the fact that the text is readable. Sobrang maayos at hindi magulo ang color scheme na napili. Kaso, hindi ganoong nakakaagaw pansin. Hindi ko rin ma-vibe sa cover na ito ang mga genre na kinapalooban ng iyong akda. Maybe you can use a darker scheme of colors for the mystery and paranormal vibes. Then look for a font na mas bongga pa sa iyong napili upang mabigyang diin ang title mo. You can always play with your text. That's how a book cover usually stands out aside from having a nice background image.

PROLOGUE/
BLURB:
10/10

I like that you used Filipino in writing your blurb. I noticed that you're really good in using this language instead of English.

Nakaka-curious at nagbibigay no'ng mystery vibe na dapat maramdaman ang iyong blurb. Gusto ko na ipinagdiinan mo ang "death" sa huling linya ng iyong blurb at nabanggit mo ang protagonist gano'n din ang tungkol sa kakaiba niyang kakayahan.