[CLOSED] Helping Hands Critique Journal

43. Forgotten

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Author: RileyAvery
Title: Forgotten
Critic: Lureylie_new0
Critique Finished: July 19, 2020
Book Status: Ongoing
Genre: Romance

TITLE
4.5%

Simple and very easy to remember. Iyan ang unang impression ko sa title. As I go over, this is a romance book pero hindi ito naging package ng title. It sounded mystery or thriller for me. Pwede mo pa siyang lagyan ng isa pang word para mas maging "romancing" ang pamagat. Aside sa vibe ng titulo, I always want my book to be unique, 'yong hindi siya magkakaroon ng kaparehas na pamagat sa ibang libro. Challenge: How many books in wattpad na may ganyang title? Mas lalo pa tayong mapapaisip kung ilan ang naging published? Let's get out of the shell, let's think deep. I know kaya mo 'yan. *Blink blink*

COVER
3.5%

     FONT: Legible naman. Madali mo lang siya ma-decipher. The clarity of the text is appropriate to the placement of it on the cover. And besides, I'm a cursive lover, and it is a big advantage for me. Cursive is the letter of love sabi pa nila kaya pluspoints ito sa akin. The quotation inclusive on the black box on the lower part was a bit small. I couldn't read it. Perhaps use a bigger font on this or more light color para mas maging visible pa siya. Imbes na magiging hooker ang quote na 'to, it turned out na ito pa ang hindi papansinin ng mga readers dahil sa pagiging maliit nito. Suggestion: Pwede mo siyang gawing isang page before the main story, para naman mapansin. Maganda kasi, and it would be so sad if your readers will not notice it.

     COLOR COMBINATION: Background color settles the mood of the cover, so you must be careful with it. Inaangat kasi ng kulay sa kung anong uri ng kwento ang meron sa isang cover. Light shades of yellow, blue and pink would tell a teen fiction stories. Mystery, thriller and horror has the opposite of light shades, giving the gore part. Romance? It really depends on your photo. Bagay-bagay lang kasi ang romance, minsan pwede ang light basta swak siya sa picture. Pwede rin sa dark -- minsan nagiging dark romance na rin, kaya konting adjust lang sa background according to the cover.

In your cover, parang nagiging spiritual ang dating pati na rin ang image. Swak naman ang picture mo, I can tell na siya ang babae sa kwento. Konting clarity lang with the image. Relevance to the title, it fits so much. Nararamdaman ko ang pangangamba ng nasa larawan, at parang iniisip niya ang maaring naging nakaraan niya sa dagat.

DESCRIPTON/
PROLOGUE
8%