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Author: moxnstaer
Story: Death Zone
Critic: wintertelle
Critique Released: May 29, 2020
Parts Read: 8 parts + prologue
Book status: On-going
Genre: FantasyTITLE
(5%)Malakas ang dating ng title mo. Sa title pa lang mag-e-expect na talaga ako na magiging deadly ang kwento.
BOOK COVER
(3%)To be honest, the cover isn't that appealing for me. It lacks emotion and interpretation sa iyong kwento. I can't get the "feels" kasi nga it's quite lacking. Try to put more elements that will signify your story, a book cover is a visual presentation of your story, after all. P'wede rin naman na magpagawa ka ng cover sa mga book cover shop dito sa wattpad. Maraming shop na open ngayon.
BLURB/
PROLOGUE
(8%)B l u r b
Short and precise. I love your blurb! Walang paligoy-ligoy. You introduced the main character and the conflict as well. Though hindi lang siya ganoon ka enticing. Wanna know why? Because your blurb is a little bit common. Marami na akong nabasang mga story, especially sa fantasy, na ililigtas ni main character ang world so parang hindi na siya ganoon ka-surprising for me. Pero kahit na ganoon masasabi kong sapat na ito para makakuha ng atensyon sa mga mambabasa.
One more thing, this part here:
Surrounded with ugly challenges, will Akame Kageyama be able to save the world?
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