[CLOSED] Helping Hands Critique Journal

33. Finally Free

DISCLAIMER:
This is not as thorough like the last one. Romance kasi ang genre kaya wala namang masyadong plot holes na mangyayari especially, it is also a slice of life. Madali lang 'to, nag-consist lang ng mga grammatical at technical errors and you'll good to go. Hindi rin ganoong karaming examples ang ibibigay ko, after examining a chapter (chapter 1), the rest will be scrutinize if there's any plot holes. I know this is your first draft but still, I have to do my role. Also, hindi ko ginawa ang critique na 'to para i-bash o siraan ang kwento o ang owtor mismo.

Also, please take note about the date when I finished the critique. Kung nag-edit man kayo after that, hindi ko na po kasalanan kung bakit hindi magkatugma ang mga sinasabi ko sa kwento niyo, at nag-e-evaluate po ako offline.

✏✏✏

Author: Eiramana325
Story: Finally Free
Critic: schizoandme
Critique Finished: May 25, 2020
Parts Read: Up until Chapter Fourteen
Book Status: On-going
Genre: General Fiction

Legend:
➡️ – An excerpt from the story
➖ – explanation/advice or examples.

📙TITLE
(5%)

Finally Free. It's nothing fancy pero may magandang tunog ang title. It's good at habang binasa ko ang kwento ay makikita talagang ang koneksyon niya sa plot. Actually, sa romance o general fiction na mga kwento, hindi naman talaga dapat pabunggahan ang title.

📙BOOK COVER
(4%)

It's simple, a jpg of two hands with a nature background tapos title but it appears too plain to me. Okay na naman ang image, siguro ibahin lang ang font at font colors.

📙BLURB/
PROLOGUE/
INTRODUCTION/
DESCRIPTION/
TEASER
(7%)

Maganda ang blurb/description mo. Thou nandoon ang element ng cliché, it never make any less beautiful. Meron lang akong suggestion, remember this part?