[CLOSED] Helping Hands Critique Journal

08. The One-Eyed Royalty

IMPORTANT NOTICE:

I am not a professional writer and/or critic. My evaluation and opinion will be based on my observation. Do note that some information about the story will be redacted in order to preserve some of the story's highlights, and to not let out spoilers which will ruin other readers' reading experience.

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Author: Miss_Enitsaaaj
Story: The One-Eyed Royalty
Critic: Pinkieditidy
Critique Released: April 25, 2020
Parts Read: 63 parts
Book Status: Complete
Genre: General Fiction

TITLE
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Aaminin ko, unang pagbasa ko sa title inakala kong fantasy ang istorya. Royal Cyclops ang pumasok sa isip XD.

Fitting. I already saw its connection on the first chapter because of the eyepatch and because of Bats' eyes, as well as the rest of the story. Masasabi kong tugma talaga ito sa istorya. Eye-catching rin ito at marketable. Thumbs up.

BOOK COVER
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Appealing. Magandang tingnan ang book cover dahil hindi masakit sa mata ang mga kulay na ginamit. The letters and fonts used were also legible. Medyo naguguluhan lang ako sa mga characters sa book cover. Are they Bats, Ezrah and Jeth? Bats, Ezrah and Ezdeath? Hindi ko mawari. Marami kasing characters sa istorya at masasabi kong prominent silang lahat dahil may mga kanya-kanya silang roles, kaya mahirap ma-interpret kung sino-sino ang mga nasa book cover. Maganda pa rin naman itong tingnan nonetheless, pero I suggest na ipakita 'yong pagiging "one-eyed royalty" ng character.

BLURB/
PROLOGUE
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01. Blurb
Threatening, but doesn't really say anything about the story. The "Try once and you'll die TWICE" phrase was used lots of times in the story at the most perfects timings so I still give it a plus point, but the basics of a blurb is missing. Ipakita niyo sa mga mambabasa ang dapat nilang abangan sa istorya. Entice the readers.

02. Prologue
It's good. Pwede na rin siyang maging blurb ng istorya. Pinakilala na agad dito ang main protagonist ng istorya in a vague way - not too much details were said pero sapat na para magkaroon ng insight sa character.

CHARACTERIZATION/
TONE
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Masasabi kong ito ang strongest point niyo, author. Marami kasi kayong characters pero lahat sila may distinct characteristics. Hindi man ito napansin sa mga unang kabanata, pero after a while madali na agad itong napapansin kaya ginanahan akong gawan sila ng character analysis dahil namangha talaga ako sa pagkakagawa sa kanila.