[CLOSED] Helping Hands Critique Journal

59. A Little Braver

DISCLAIMER
I am not a professional writer and/or critique in any way. I just want to share my knowledge and help fellow writers to improve and learn. All of my analysis is based on my observation, so feel free to correct me if I misread something.

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Author: amarANNEth
Story: A Little Braver
Critic: celestialfairie
Critique Finished: August 5, 2020
Parts Read: 30 parts
Book Status: Completed
Genre: Romance

TITLE
(3%)

Although it sounds romantic and befitting its genre, the title is common and lacks individuality. Ten books have the same title, and that is in Wattpad, alone. Kanta rin siya ng New Empire and even if you based your title off their song, it doesn't necessarily help, dahil wala ngang individuality.

If you can think of a more creative title, please do so. Mas magiging madali iyon para magstand-out ang story mo.

COVER
(5%)

Idyllic and charming. Easily readable ang title at malakas ang hila ng tatlong badges sa gilid. May kalabuan lang ang pangalan ng author, but it is excusable.

BLURB/
PROLOGUE/
TEASER/
INTRODUCTION
(7%)

> Description.

It has the basics needed for a description to be effective; napakilala ang characters at nagpahapyaw sa ano ang maaaring mangyari sa storya. The execution/ wordplay could be done better, pero okay lang iyon dahil pwede pa namang ma-improve.

The first two statements describing Storm are so-so kaya I won't elaborate on them further. What I'll dissect instead are the last two sentences.

He is all the negative words you can compile into a statement.