[CLOSED] Helping Hands Critique Journal

58. Why Are You Here, Stella?

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Author: ameliorist_
Story: Why Are You Here, Stella?
Critic: SENYORITANGA
Critique Finished: August 5, 2020
Parts Read: 19 parts
Book Status: On-Going
Genre: Fantasy, Light Romance

TITLE
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The title is indeed catchy, for me. Aside from it's a question which triggered the curiosity of the readers, you mentioned a name that will make your reader ask themselves, "who is Stella?" and also, "who is the one asking the title?". Dahil dito sa title mo, madali mong maho-hook ang mga tao na basahin ang libro mo. Good job!

BOOK COVER
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So, I noticed that you changed your cover. The first one is good, but I must say that the current one is better. Why? Iyong una kasi, light romance lang ang nakikita ko sa genre while itong pangalawa ay mas nagsusumigaw ang fantasy sa kaniya. Well, maganda naman iyong paggamit mo ng Batanes lighthouse doon sa una pero mas appealing talaga itong isa para sa akin. Sa parehong covers, nagawa mong i-highlight ang pangalang "Stella" sa title, the first one was because of the font and the color while this one is because of the font. And also, maganda rin ang theme color mo sa current color which is blue, dahil masarap siya sa mata (kung anong lasa, hulaan niyo).

Napansin ko lang na cursive (correct me if I'm wrong) ang font ng author's name. I just found it a bit awkward. Siguro ay mas maganda kung mas simpleng font ang gamitin para rito, lalo na at may underscore (_) ang username mo. Ito ay opinyon ko lang naman.

Other than that, wala naman na akong masasabi sa cover mo because it turned out good! Great job! Nice choice, author!

TEASERS/
INTRODUCTION/
BLURB/
PROLOGUE
[9%]