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Main Characters: The Marauders, Lily Evans, Severus Snape, Ariana and Geraldine Grindelwald, Scarlet Lestrange and a few others.
Description:
This is a Marauders era fanfic. It's about the marauders and their life when they went to Hogwarts. I hope you enjoy. I have worked really hard on this.
Chapter Count: 7 and ongoing.
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Now let's get on with the review!
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1. The Title:
The title is extremely simple but as there aren't much chapters published in the fanfic, I suppose it might collaborate with the theme later on.
2. The Cover:
The cover is a tad too childish. Simply using a drawing with the story's title is not going to be very appealing to the readers. I suggest the author to check out graphic shops on Wattpad or try to improve the cover.
3. Concept:
The story is based on the Marauders and a few other students and focuses on their first year at Hogwarts.
4. Review (includes Summary too):
The story starts with an introduction to all characters in separate paragraphs. A scene from the Hogwarts express is shown where the characters meet students their age and make friends. Further the fanfic proceeds on to their days at Hogwarts.
What I think:
I think the concept of the story is good but it needs a few improvements. Such as there should be more text than just dialogues and the pace of the fanfic should be slowed down a little. The characters have been extensively thought out but they need to be adjusted well in the story by giving them more depth and details.
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If you are looking for a lighthearted but fast pacing story that tackles the pranks and fun times spent by the Marauders then this is the book for you.
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MangoPinapple3 Your fanfic needs a lot of work. But it has great potential and I know with some edits you will definitely improve this. I would suggest you to change the cover, either make one with symbols that represent you fanfic such as the Marauder's animagi forms or ask someone to make a cover, there are many graphic and cover shops on Wattpad including mine.
Also, try and research more deeply and reread your fanfic in order to improve a few aspects. Lengthen the chapters and include more events instead of a lot of dialogues. Moreover, include an appropriate description. For help regarding that you can check out Don't no 13 of this book.
I will be happy to help in any way possible and all you have to do is send a message. However, I wish you best of luck and success for the future.
