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Review #5: A Ripple in a Void

ThinkAlien

First Impression: beautiful cover!

I love your descriptions; they are so vivid and create the perfect image in my head. I think descriptions are probably your strong suit. I also noticed that you have very strong vocabulary that really helps with your descriptions. The transition from the dream was pretty smooth, which was really good. I also liked the small bit of humor that was laced in. The part where she was dreaming was a little confusing though, because of the double her, and I just didn't know what that part was going to be for. But since you only have 3 parts, you probably will reveal it in the future. I would love to see more background information on the characters, like their age, or their families. You do a great job describing their physical appearances and characterizing them, which is good because each character has their own personality. I love the ending with Melissa thinking that it was the 24th century. Definitely brings in some questions and I'm eager to read on!

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