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Review #21: That Boy At My Attic

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by bluecrayonlady

Dedicated to MeeHatesYoouu

by bluecrayonlady

MeeHatesYoouu

First Impression: cute cover!

One thing, shouldn't it be "That Boy In My Attic," instead of "at?" I just feel like it's more correct that way. I like your start, it's very detailed and gives insight on the characters. I can also really see their personalities through their actions. The story is very cute and there is lots of humor in it, which had me laughing at some parts. Lola is crazy. Make sure to watch your verb tense because you tend to change from past to present and then back to past. Just try to stay consistent when talking about the same situation.

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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- bluecrayonlady