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Review #52: The 24th Hunger Games

AWriterCanDream

First Impression: nice cover!

This is a really well written story! I really like your writing style, and everything flows well. I was able to keep up with your writing the whole time, and you had my attention captured. You have great vocabulary, and the right balance of imagery. Great start that moves at a decent pace. I like how also reveal Kaede's weaknesses, to show that he is a flawed main character. This makes him more relatable to the audience because the heroes that are perfect are very unrealistic. I like how there is internal and external conflict going on, and you capture the essence of that very well. I also like how you convey emotions really well, and I can actually feel Kaede's struggle throughout. I always advise writers to go over their pieces once they've finished it to do brief editing because there are some very minor errors. I also found that you repeat the last paragraph of a previous chapter when you start a new chapter, and I would suggest to not repeat it. 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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