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Review #37: Beyond the Fence

shadowhunter809

First Impression: I love the cover!

This is a really well written story! I like the summary, it's short but eye-catching. I like how you gradually add in the mystery and information, so we get a little bit slowly. You have great vocabulary that really helps with your descriptions. I would love to see more description of what Albama lifestyle was like, and more description of the scenery. Why would Clary want to leave Albama? Was it because living there was miserable for her? If it was just based off of curiosity, it would be a very impulsive and stupid decision to just leave. What would happen after they leave? Are they just going to go to school and hide for the rest of their life? Also, when Austin yells at them in his room, shouldn't his father be able to hear him? It's a little unrealistic, and they would've been caught by now. Otherwise, I really like this story and I'm eager to read on!

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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