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Review #11: Amnesia

seaofroses07

First Impression: cute cover :)

This is a really well planned story! I like how the introduction makes a big impact, and leaves a lasting impression on the reader. I also love that you have very detailed descriptions and sometimes switch points of views so we get the whole story. However, in the beginning of chapter 2, it was a little confusing when you brought in Blair and Ava. I would explain who they are in that part so we don't find out later. Everything flows well in the story, and I like how you gradually bring in the conflict at a decent pace. I'm just a little confused about the whole "cube trip." What does that mean? There are also some spelling errors, but that is very minor. 

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