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Review #28: Midnight Promises

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First Impression: amazing cover!

I really like the summary, it's cute, informative, and is a great start to the story. I also like the plot of this, although I don't know where it will be headed towards. Are you going to show her journey of recovering? What I don't get is why she needs a makeover to start dating again. She should just stay the same. It gives a really bad message, like telling people they need to change their looks to be good enough. I also suggest not using so many "..." after each sentence, because it just doesn't add to the story. You also don't have age descriptions, or any physical descriptions, which are necessary to a story. I also suggest that you show us and don't tell, show us how she felt, and convey her emotions to us when she was heartbroken after getting dumped by Mark. 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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