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review by sasmina

Title:you can only hurt a heart little....
Author: @darkksouul
Status:not completed

Book cover:
I think you should change the cover and have like a realistic one with people

Title:
The title is too long and tiring

Story detail area:

I suggest you to keep something like this in detail

When one day, guy who hates the word love collides with these mesmerizing girl and falls in love but what comes with loving.........

And please dont let people know about the triangle

Story:
I think you have a great story going on your mind but its not coming the right way as you are writing

Writing:
I like the use of words and paragraphs

The only problem are you are mentioning things very early like
How you mentioned about basketball, meeting her at cousin's wedding before the story started.

I suggest you to first have the event where he meets the girl

Then on next chapter have a pov
But in that pov just mention that night

For example
I met this girl she was so beautiful and unique we did this that.....

Later on when you move to further chapter have a moment of that basketball court create some magic

And also have thoughts on prologue on italics just to separate out....
That's all I have to say for now

Hope you dont get angry with me I was being honest..
If you want someone else to review too let me know

And I would love to read thay story...

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