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Review by sasmina

Title:without a goodbye

Author:Iris_thegoddess

I choosed this book to read because the book cover and title looked appealing and the bio was good too.

This book has no story ,its just like pieces of dialogues or some moment that could be used in a novel.

If you ask me why there's so many reason.

1. Firstly you did not state the reason why they broke up and what was the reason?

2. Secondly okay the guy died and she reached there and they came to know he died
Then the story ended with no thoughts on the girl mind just the thought that he left her without saying goodbye.....

3. The starting is not good actually the whole thing makes no sense .

4. Use right instead of naa.
Some of your sentences are incorrect.
Paragraphs too long with no spacing in each dialogues .
Unnecessarily use of fullstops.

Here's a tip

Firstly delete all the chapters,
And start fresh.
I'll give you the idea.

Start from the hospital,the doctor comes out and says his dead.
Then she freaks out and suddenly gets freezed....

Then the guy body is been taken
She holds him last time and says you left me without goodbye and im sorry......

The guy left a note

Where the story starts I saw you at thiss......
Your first look made me......
Then we became close..... into relation.....

And make it look like that it was her misunderstanding ...

Then she realizes and ended with a letter or poem like dear ......
With some inspiring words and there should be a moral too

About misunderstanding
Or trust or anything relatable.

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