Review by: _boho_chick_
For: Candaayy
Title:
title is fine. But it could be better, more catchy, something that would pull the reader in.
Cover:
A better cover is needed. Period.
Description: It sounds clichéd. Broken girl, normal guy, a past that is not to be visited. But, I find it good, interesting.
View on the Story:
I like the way the story begins, and the way it unfolds. The mystery element is present and the way you introduce it seems commendable. The main character's are cute, Josh is nice, however, calling Alexis his in the first meeting itself seems a bit obsessive. That is my personal view on him.
I think the use of emojis in the text makes it seem more like you're texting rather than writing a story. As a writer, words are your weapon, so I don't think emojis are a good idea.
You need to work on your spacing a bit, and the grammar.
Your writing style is nice, just working on a few things will make the story a worthwhile read.
Hope this helped.
Love,
Stuti.
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