Twinklish

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Book title :- Twinklish

Author :- twinklehemani750

Reviewer :- resplend

Book title

I didn't like the title of your book. It could have been a little more catchy and different. I would advice you to change it!

Rating :- 01/05

Book cover

The cover of your book is pretty simple. It could be even more beautiful with your username visible on it. It's hardly visible! I'd advice you to change it.

Rating :- 02/05

Content

Your poems are wow! I mean, a biggie WOW! I seriously loved your poems. They're so cute and awesome. Some are emotional too. I just loved 'em!!

I thoroughly enjoyed reading your work but there were certain errors which I would like to point out.

Rating :- 4.5/05

Corrections

1) 'Forever?' she asked. 'Yes, forever' he answered.

She sat recollecting those days, teary eyed, vision blurred.

Corrected

'Forever?' she asked.
'Yes, forever' he answered.

She sat recollecting those days,
Teary eyes, blurry vision.

2) But for him, her presence was of 'Just another girl'.

Corrected

But for him, her presence was of 'Just Another Girl.'

Tips

1) Use the centre alignment. It gives a good look to the poem.

2) You can use thesaurus because it can help you out with synonyms.

3) After writing always reread your poems.

4) Work hard on rhymes.

Overall rating :- 3.5/05

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That's all! I hope that you'll keep these things in your mind and I really hope that they will help you further with your writings.

I'm extremely sorry if you felt bad about anything! You can contact me if you need any kind of help.

Keep writing!

All the best!

-Ira

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