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PLOT AND IDEA: Interesting
SUMMARY: "If you don't want to sink, you better figure out how to swim." Gabriel said, his hazel eyes holding a deep emotion I couldn't quite comprehend.
I had a feeling that he was not only referring to my lack of ability to swim but my growing feelings towards him. Feelings that I could never act on.
"That's some groundbreaking advice right there." I said clapping, attempting to diffuse the tension in the air. "Someone, please, hand this genius a medal."
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When the small town of Burman attracts the attention of the government due to the growing risk of drowning, a swimming project seems to be the only solution.This project brings together two people that could not be leading more opposite lives. Whilst she felt totally and utterly alone, he enjoyed a life full of loving and understanding people.It might seem like their differences would make it difficult for them to accept one another and set their differences aside. But maybe, deep inside, they weren't as different they first thought.
MY REVIEW: First of all, when I first saw your cover I absolutely loved it.
Anyway lets begin;
You have a good spacing and paragraphing for the most part from what I've read so and seen so far, but some parts need just a little bit of help. (You sometimes separate your dialogue and actions that happen right afterwards.) Your story is very interesting, but you have grammar issues and the flow is a bit shaky due to the fact that your tense switches often.
Although you do have good capitalization, but the punctuation could use some help in a few areas. (P.s. don't forget the punctuation in the dialogue.) You could be a bit more descriptive in your story as you move along. (You start being less descriptive the more I continued to read.) No true character development from the parts I did read; they seemed to not develop very much in the first few chapters.
Your dialogue gets better as I get further into the story, but I am waiting for your plot to fully set in. The cover I'm assuming ties in with the fact of your main characters fear, so it seems very good for the story. The transition seems quite good, not rocky at all.
RATING: 7
OVERALL: Nice story, just a few errors here and there.
