Plot and Idea: Intriguing
Genre: Science Fiction
Summary:
Imagine music doesn't exist...
When quiet Nadine is visited by a mysterious familiar figure, she discovers things are not as she remembers. In a world without music or any form of self expression, a group called the "Composers" initiate a fight with the Regulators, and they might need Nadine to lead the way. If she breaks out of her role of sidekick, she'll find out what it means to be a true hero for the cause and learn the true definition of pain...
My Review:
Alright, so your story has an ominous cover, but is still interesting. Your paragraphing seems to be fine, though the dialogue feels a little too forced. The punctuation is good, though there are some errors from time to time. The grammar is great, but you misspell things sometimes, which is not a big thing if you type too fast. The description could use a bit more work, so that it fits in better to your story. The pace that you are using could be perceived as a bit too fast to readers, so I'd slow things down.
The character is interesting, though really confusing to get a sense of. The development seems to be struggling a bit, though it seems the effort of that happening is there. The capitalization is great and the sentence structure is okay. Your plot is there, but I feel like it needs to grow more in order to feel like a different world when readers read it. Overall, you do need to work on many things in order to catch and keep the attention of those who find your book.
Rating: 7
Overall: This could use some work, but is a good read.
