Dedicated @MidnightStorm14
Plot and Idea: Interesting
Summary: Cassie is part of the most fearsome race on the planet, but she sure isn't good at acting like it. Cassie has fears. Fears that people of the vampire world would never understand. Will she be able to overcome her cowardliness to save the race she fears with the help of an enforcer or will she let the world fall?
My Review: So the beginning of the first chapter was a little fast, try spacing out everything a bit. As I continued I noticed you had lots of periods, try putting more comma's and other signs. Read the story yourelf and all the problems you see you can also change, because as i read a few things didn't sound like they should be in a certain sentance. But i think overall the story is good, not much needs fixing.
Rating: 9
Overall: I would continue to read this
