Plot and Idea: No words
Genre: Short Story
Summary: Asher has an obsession with Cameron and will do anything to get her...anything....
'This is a short story I wrote for my Creative Writing class at school. Hope you like it.'Enjoy:)@IndieHipster10
My Review: ...Wait... In the first chapter wasn't her mouth taped up? Okay anyway, review time! So I found this story entertaining weirdly. I wish you had more description though so I could get a better feel of everything. Anyway your spacing and grammar were good and you had good paragraphing and your tense was good, but SLOW DOWN the pace lol. I wish I could get a better feel of the characters. Anyway your description can be better in quantity, but from what you have it's quality is good. There wasn't anything I saw that was horrible and stood out in a painful way. I hope you keep the story original and I'm going to check it again as soon as I'm done with all these reviews haha!
Rating: 8.9
Overall: I will read this, but hope you take some of the notes :)
