Plot and Idea: Alright
Genre: Short Story
Summary: This is a short story of something that happened to me and I needed to share.
My Review: The paragraphs in this story are a bit too long and the spacing needs work. The cover is cute, but the words seem to not stay in bounds and have a very boring font. Though you have proper punctuation in the beginning, you lack it in dialogue. The dialogue is also a bit boring and your grammar needs work in terms of context.
Though your pace is good in the beginning, you lack it toward the middle and end. The description is actually pretty good when your characters are not speaking, but the flow of your story also is not that good. Although this story has a better idea, it still is lacking much in terms of being a more well read and interesting short story.
Rating: 5.2
Overall: This story is slightly better than the first, but still needs work.
