Dedicated to @JessandRich for writing the book.
Plot & Idea: (same as before)
Summary: "ELOUNOR BROKE UP! BUT WHY?" Well, because let's just say something happened, with Louis. "Well why?" I'll tell you.
My Review: Ok so the repetition is still there in the first chap, you can separate the long paragrah in half. There are some grammer mistakes as well, the exclamation first sentence chapter two isn't there. You also put captilization on Harry's first words chapter two, if he has an exclamation point it wouldn't be 'said' the same for the next morning, and in the closet the very first word is capitalized and nothing else. And you use 'said' often try different words. Chapter three spacing is missing, Capitalization ect... So after re-reading this story I did not see much change. Though the cover is much better than before so it'll catch eyes of some people.
My Rating: stll 5
Overall: I think the story still needs editing
5 chapters
