Dedicated @Kyrene_Ko
Plot and idea: Good but been done before
Summary: Nina was a happy seventeen year old girl who had everything she ever needed. Just one car accident caused her to lose everything on her special eighteen birthday. Her family, her friends, and her happiness, all gone. After the accident she became antisocial which caused her many problem, from an abuse relationship, to a stalker to friends with benefits. Which she had to keep to herself but soon would break. As a problem appeared into Nina life, she met two handsome guys and started to like both of them. As she gets to know them better she is stuck between who to choose. As one of them will soon cause a problem for her to deal with but continued to liked him, and the other one will soon to solve her problems one step at a time.
This is an edited draft of my story that I'm still working on. Please fill free to leave a comment, every comment will be appreciated ^__^
My review: OK so the begining doesn't seem to pull in a reader. It seems as if the story is starting in the middle of the story if that makes any sense. Please check your spacing, it is better to seperate your dialogue from the paragraphs so the story will be easier to follow. Try adding your own twist to parts so that it will be more interesting for the readers. But i have not seen any grammer problems yet, but you do have spacing problems and it makes it very easy to lose track of your place when reading. I do not want to insult you but this is a little painful to read, but it may be just me.
Rating: 6
Overall: The story isn't very interesting, it doesn't pull me in, try making it more interesting and different from all the others writing this same genre
